Need Opinions on essay paper...

Need Opinions on essay paper...

I turn this in on my Saturday class...yea sucks to go to class on saturday i kno....

First of all, this essay is for a cultural geography class and we have to write about the life of a person in from a different area of the world and my topic was "The Life of A Suicide Bomber". And oh yea, it has to be written in "1st person" too.....that and this is not an accurate story about 9/11....the only thing accurate is the flight number and the flight times....



Life of a Suicide Bomber

My mission is to destroy all of those who are impure. I have hatred for all those who are not followers of Allah and those who attack my muslim people and feel as if I must do something about it in respect to my religion. If im going to die, why not take everyone else with me; its not like i have anything to lose other than my poor level of a life. I know in the end, I am doing the right thing. I will fulfill my destiny that is a suicide bomber.

My name is Mohammad Najih Saleem. I've been living here in my cubical of a house for about 9 years now. I moved out of my family's house down the streen when I was 16 years old but have been supporting them since I was 8 which was when I started working as a water carrier for the neighborhood. I am now 25 years old and still sending them money. Conditions in this area are deteriorating and all I do anymore is work for barely anything, come home, sit on my stiff bed and look out a hole in the ceiling caused by a mortar attack by the cursed United States army. It seems like I work and live for nothing and it makes me depressed. I keep asking Allah to help me, but my life has yet to change and the gunfire exchanged between foreign troops and my people still keep me up at night. Everyday, I see my people die from men to women to children; they line the sides of the streets now. The troops and the United States just don't understand that they can not enter my country and change our land because their religion thinks our religious ways of our land is incorrect. How dare them! Globalization as they see it, will not work for everyone. They want to help us by changing our ways to theirs. They would be better off giving us money and allow us to make changes for ourselves.I know Allah wants me to make those bloody Americans pay. Us muslims should be the ones to be mirrored. They're insane to believe that Christianity is the right religion over Islam.

I leave for America tomorrow and begin flight school the day after I arrive. I'm so glad there is someone here in Afghanistan than understands and speaks out for the Islamic cause. Osama Bin Laden and myself have been pretty close since my father was one of his loyalists and my father still continues to help provide funding for the Taliban. I guess thats where my money has been going to. Bin Laden gave me $20,000, a copy of his interpretation of Islam, all proper identification and documents (all of which were forged of course), and gave me a letter. He told me not to open the letter until before the attack which was to be set on September 11, 2001. Before I left, he told me that my mission was to teach America a lesson; not to mess with Muslims and to kill as many people as possible with one attack striking fear in the eyes of Americans. I took my aircraft manuals and blueprints, my flight ticket, and a list of Taliban members who would be meeting me a few months before we were to attack. Its been a year now. I dropped out of flight school because I now know how to operate an aircraft and don't need any more information. I met up with the other Taliban members a few weeks ago and everything has been perfectly choreographed. Our plan is going smoothly and no one has a clue.

Today, it's 5:30 a.m. September 11, 2001. I'm sitting in the airport, two hours early just so I can have final thoughts to myself. I'm thinking about my family and friends I left behind back at Afghanistan. I'll miss them very much. At the same time, I keep envisioning continuous flashes of gunfire, bombs dropping from F-18 fighter jets, and innocent people being dismembered right on my front doorstep as a daily occurance. Just thinking about it makes me wish that I could jump on that flight right now. Seeing all these rich Americans flaunting their money through their clothes and Louis Vutton luggage bags makes me sick. That Louis Vutton bag could've bought food for my entire neighborhood for three days and yet, they carry Louis Vutton items everywhere while at the same time, expressing sorrow for my country and not sending money to us so we can live just as they do. What a bunch of hypocrites! If they want globalization, they should share their wealth with those who have never experienced it. They fill up their giant SUV's with fuels from my region but leave very little to share with the rest of the world. They will pay. I see the rest of the Taliban members arrive one by one right as our 7:30 a.m. boarding call goes over the intercom. At 7:59 a.m., we departed from Boston on Flight 11 en route to Los Angeles. Looking out my window as the plane takes off, I realize there's no turning back, so I just hold the Quran in my hand, close my eyes, and recite one last prayer. I know i'm doing the right thing. After about 30 minutes of flight time, I take one deep breath, looked to my friends, and took action. First, i killed the flight attendants, then the pilot. The cockpit was exactly similar to the one in flight school so turning the gigantic flying missle was no problem. Its now 8:39 a.m. and I see my target in the nearing background; the World Trade Center in New York City.

I am a few minutes away from the target but I feel as if I forgot something. I ripped the transponder out so we couldn't be tracked and the plane is flying just fine....what else could it be? The letter from Osama; I took it out from my pocket, opened it, and it read. It said "You will be with Allah soon my friend. You will be remembered as a martyr in the Islamic world forever" and the letter ended with the cresent moon with a star in the center, which is the sign of Islam. I fell more relaxed now. After all those years of living in a depressed and oppressed land, I, a single member of the muslim world, finally get my chance to make a stand against it and I know my voice will be heard across the world in a just a couple more minutes. The World Trade Center is getting bigger and closer, that I can almost make out the silhouette of the oblivious office workers through the large pane windows of the building. I look back to the rest of my friends and I yell one last time "Allah vindicates us" as the clock strikes 8:45 a.m.

i read the last paragraph or so (NO damn way im readin that whole thing right now lol) but yeah seems well done... is this a fictional story assignment?

spell check.... re check for grammar..... and if you arent careful youre going to have the governments eyes on you for writing a paper like that

not something i would write about

Your asking the wrong guy to check your paper...lol. I have someone else check that for me.

looking ok... kind of a weird topic though... damn it, speaking of papers, i have to write mine too... its bout tom clancy... anyways, it looks good...

Thanks for the feedback guys....i understand its a very sensitive subject but i chose this because all the topics that she listed on the board to chose from were already taken and about more than half of them were sensitive topics as well...i was left with only about 4 topics to chose from cuz i was one of the last to pick...there are alot of grammer errors in it but its only a rough draft....ill be writing a final copy later tonight...and plus this topic wouldntve been my topic but all the other topics i could chose from were too hard or too stupid to do....and plus I tried to make my essay somewhat impactful to get my point across because we are suppose to write about someone and show how that person operates and all.......its for cultural geography so i guess......

is this for high school or uni?

its for college...i think the teacher would be fired if it were for highschool...

Oh ok, with that in mind, i like it but a little short maybe do more background or more filler in between going to america and 9/11. If you keep it as it is it's fine, nice style.